I think the red lipped one works well on the point of contrast. The choice of the bright red on dark grays really makes it pop out. I dig how both have a sort of "gritty" feel with the long and strangely aligned teeth. Your concentration of expression seems to fit this pretty well, but maybe the frowny one is a bit too literal (something about getting the small detailed, zoomed in parts of the picture that mcB talked 'bout).
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but the philtrum groove is killing me! - kinda mustachy, but very nice play on the lights and darks on both :-)
i agree with lauren i really like the red lips..sexy haha. I think that to make them go together a little more if thats what your trying to do, you could add a little more dark to the dark part of the red lips one so that they both have a really black side to them. Also maybe work the top lip of the light pink one a little more cause it looks a little narrow, maybe just add some shadding on top. I really like them both!!
The teeth in the one with the red lips are really bothering me. They don't look lined up with the position of the lips. I really want to see these in person to see the texture the molding paste gives each piece. Well done on showing different expressions in each piece
I feel like the lips in the one with the lipstick just look stuck onto the face, they don't look like they are a part of it. I think you need to play with the shading of the top lip (the bow i think its called?) I definitely like the red but i'm not sure how i feel about some of the more vertical lines in the lips. also the top lip seems really outliney. just get in there and dont be afraid of the paint! I like how you did the shadow on the bottom lip. (: With both of them i would pay close attention to the teeth. You need to constantly be looking back and forth from your reference picture to get them to look correct. Some of the teeth look more concave and they should be convex...i have that the right way around right? I think you know what i mean. (:
I actually like these a lot more than I thought I would. My favorite part about it is how they interact and how the line of the face of the one on the left continues to the lips of the one on the right, creating movement and guiding your eye throughout the composition. The biggest problem I see, though I didn't notice at first, is that the lipstick one seems to be missing teath or have teeth in the wrong place. They are facing the viewer while the lips are not. Also (being really picky) I think the lip on the right could use some rounding off. They are slighty to harsh and straight at the bottom. And, one tip, (I don't know if it would work for this medium) if you combine dark blue and dark brown (burnt umber and prussian blue) it creates a warmer tone of black. Black and white often seem too cool. You can even add a little purple in the mix. Anyway, I don't know if you care about any of this, but I think you did a good job (no matter how frustrating it might be).
I think that its a pretty cool idea to take one idea-- lips, and develop into 2 different pieces. it ties the concentration together, but also shows the different aspects of the concentration theme.
I agree with someone above that said the teeth with the red lips look more like you're looking straight on toward the teeth, but looking at an angle on the lips. Or that the teeth aren't far enough forward in the mouth? But I really like the shadow and light that you used on both pieces.
I think the red lipped one works well on the point of contrast. The choice of the bright red on dark grays really makes it pop out. I dig how both have a sort of "gritty" feel with the long and strangely aligned teeth. Your concentration of expression seems to fit this pretty well, but maybe the frowny one is a bit too literal (something about getting the small detailed, zoomed in parts of the picture that mcB talked 'bout).
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but the philtrum groove is killing me! - kinda mustachy, but very nice play on the lights and darks on both
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i agree with lauren i really like the red lips..sexy haha. I think that to make them go together a little more if thats what your trying to do, you could add a little more dark to the dark part of the red lips one so that they both have a really black side to them. Also maybe work the top lip of the light pink one a little more cause it looks a little narrow, maybe just add some shadding on top. I really like them both!!
ReplyDeleteThe teeth in the one with the red lips are really bothering me. They don't look lined up with the position of the lips. I really want to see these in person to see the texture the molding paste gives each piece. Well done on showing different expressions in each piece
ReplyDeleteI feel like the lips in the one with the lipstick just look stuck onto the face, they don't look like they are a part of it. I think you need to play with the shading of the top lip (the bow i think its called?) I definitely like the red but i'm not sure how i feel about some of the more vertical lines in the lips. also the top lip seems really outliney. just get in there and dont be afraid of the paint! I like how you did the shadow on the bottom lip. (: With both of them i would pay close attention to the teeth. You need to constantly be looking back and forth from your reference picture to get them to look correct. Some of the teeth look more concave and they should be convex...i have that the right way around right? I think you know what i mean. (:
ReplyDeleteI actually like these a lot more than I thought I would. My favorite part about it is how they interact and how the line of the face of the one on the left continues to the lips of the one on the right, creating movement and guiding your eye throughout the composition. The biggest problem I see, though I didn't notice at first, is that the lipstick one seems to be missing teath or have teeth in the wrong place. They are facing the viewer while the lips are not. Also (being really picky) I think the lip on the right could use some rounding off. They are slighty to harsh and straight at the bottom. And, one tip, (I don't know if it would work for this medium) if you combine dark blue and dark brown (burnt umber and prussian blue) it creates a warmer tone of black. Black and white often seem too cool. You can even add a little purple in the mix. Anyway, I don't know if you care about any of this, but I think you did a good job (no matter how frustrating it might be).
ReplyDeleteI think that its a pretty cool idea to take one idea-- lips, and develop into 2 different pieces. it ties the concentration together, but also shows the different aspects of the concentration theme.
ReplyDeleteI agree with someone above that said the teeth with the red lips look more like you're looking straight on toward the teeth, but looking at an angle on the lips. Or that the teeth aren't far enough forward in the mouth?
But I really like the shadow and light that you used on both pieces.